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[Roddy.]

People hatin' on me cause I have Swag, and I snatch there chick, she took it up the back
I went in hard she took it like a champ, went in like a mission in Iraq
Bombed it like Bin Laden, and hid for 10 years
Started controversy like Britney Spears 
Pissing off people like when WalMart has 30 registers but only 2 cashiers 
Do your ears hear lyrical fear or is it just me
Wipe your mic off, it's dusty 
After I got in the game you quit
You said every bit of me was what you wanted to be 
My game is on point, literally, lyrically

Just wrote this to Niggas In Paris, what do you guys think?

[TragikRhymes]

First, I gotta ask how old are you again bro? Jw

But it was a good attempt, I feel what you going for...as far, as reading, it wasn't very fluent; either you need to adjust your lines or change certain words...besides that I dig this lil piece and you got potential

[Roddy.]

13 bro.

Yea after I posted this I changed up alot of it, as I do with the rest of the songs i write. Thanks for the feedback.